Student Solution

-->

"Education is the most powerful weapon which you can use to change the world”
– Nelson Mandela

1 University

1 Course

2 Subjects

Second Draft of Essay 1

Second Draft of Essay 1

Q Essay 1 Draft 2 • Points 35 • Submitting a file upload Using your peer's comments, the Essay prompt and the questions I provided for the peer letter, create a 2nd draft of Essay 1. The essay must be three full pages minimum. NOTE: PLEASE REVISE. Many students lose points by turning in the same copy of their Essay 1 first draft for their Essay 1 draft 2. In addition to losing points, however, this mistake affects final grades too because these students haven't actually done three revisions of their essays by the end of the semester. The more we revise, the better our work becomes. Your partners worked hard on their responses to you. Make the changes they suggest that make sense for you, AND make other changes as you see fit. What can you add to the essay? What can you delete in the essay? What can you move around in the essay? Don't forget to check your MLA formatting. Your essay should match the headers and font and spacing of this handout: sample mla.pdf Actions Once you've turned this in, you will get comments from me on Draft 2 for your portfolio revision. Along with the 10 points for your Peer Letter and 5 points for your Essay 1 Draft 1, you will receive a score of 35 points - for a total of 50 points. As of right now, you are earning a ton more points for doing the assignment than for the quality of the work. This will change with the portfolio at the end of the semester when you will get a new set of points for quality. Rubric Essay 1 302 Essay 1 302 Criteria Ratings Pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeEssay Evaluation: Introduction and Thesis Does the student introduce and describe the visual piece? Is more description needed? Does the student introduce the main argument of cartoon early on in the essay's introduction? Does the student introduce the intended audience for the cartoon? Is more analysis needed? Does the student address the background issues of education that the audience needs to understand in order to get the humor of the cartoon? 5 pts Full Marks 0 pts No Marks 5 pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeEssay Evaluation: Development of Ideas Does the student analyze the uses of pathos, ethos and logos in the visual argument? Where in the essay does this happen? Is the analysis effective? Why or why not? Is there a thorough analysis of how the words and images work together in the student's essay? 5 pts Full Marks 0 pts No Marks 5 pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeSubmission Requirements: Draft 2 Has Draft 2 been substantially revised from Draft 1? 10 pts Full Marks 0 pts No Marks 10 pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeSubmission Requirements: Draft 2 Requirements Was Draft 2 submitted on time? Does Draft 2 meet the page requirement? 10 pts Full Marks 0 pts No Marks 10 pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeSubmission Requirements: Formatting Does Draft 2 meet all of the paper formatting requirements? 5 pts Full Marks 0 pts No Marks 5 pts Total Points: 35

View Related Questions

Solution Preview

List one single point that is common between a bird, a monkey, a penguin, an elephant, a goldfish in a glass bowl, a seal, and a dog? Nothing, absolutely nothing! There is not a single thing common between the listed animals and birds except that they are all non-humans, who appear together for an exam in a cartoon. Titled “Our Education System” the cartoon is a sarcastic visual comment on the existent education system. Embedded with humor, the cartoon passes a powerful statement on how unfair the education system has been. The cartoon address multiple flaws of the education system, much more than what meets the eye.